Making the first page of my local newspaper

I have used the page measurements as I did with the front cover from the newspaper, yet added five coloums instead of four:




















Here is a mock up of how I would like the first page of my local newspaper to look:

I especially liked the way the "Ham&High" local newspaper designed there first page as they show each main article included in the newspaper including lead ins to show which show readers which page to turn to to read the full article. The black boxes indicate where images or advertisements are places, I would personally perhaps include more images as this appeals more towards a younger audience and is also more tabloid like, which is what i am aiming for . In the first column they have put a contents with a list of different articles included and also a "regulars"section which includes different topics such as music, theatre, books, films etc with the page numbers for each places next to them.