Editing Articles For My Newspaper

After reading though my articles for my local newspaper, I felt I could add some humour and more exctiement to them. Here are the before and after articles for my second page:

james arthur comes to town - James Arthur, the 2012 X Factor 

winner, will be visting the town hall   next month to sing for the patients of Mount     Vernon hospital and speak to the patients individually. The hospital was extatic to here the news of the star coming as it was a complete suprise. James chose the Mount Vernon hospital in paticular to visit, as he discovered how involved the hospital are in helping patients with

Parkinsons disease, which is something he finds very close to his heart.  Read Page7 to find out more. 

rumours of a new nightclub - The council are debating whether to open a new night club in town where the old club Gate Grasher used to be. They feel they need to bring something more

 alternative and different from the other clubs in the area. Read Page 14 to read more.

help needed for the carnival - The Harrow Youth League are in desperate need of volunteers for the 

Carnival coming up this Summer. They are looking for young people from the age of 15-20 to help bring some ideas to the table about what they can have at the 

carnival. Food? Entertainment? Music? It’s all down to the HA 6 locals what they want!

new chinese buffet - A new chinese restraunt and buffet, “Tao Peking” has been opened on the 

corner of Eastcote highstreet, Leighton Avenue. Their special meal  of the all you can eat buffet for only £5 allready seems to be popular with teenagers. Read P. 20 for a review.


After:

X-Factor winner James Arthur is to visit Mt. Vernon Hospital next month. He will be performing his latest single as well as meeting patients in the Parkinson ward. The hospital was ecstatic to hear the news of the star coming as it came as a complete surprise. James has a strong interest in Parkinson disease and had heard of the great work that Mt. Vernon had been doing. ‘To find a hospital with such dedication to this awful disease is inspiring’ the crooner said.

Rumours that a new nightclub, Reflex, is applying for a licence from the council have been confirmed. The license is expected to be granted in the next couple of weeks. Enthusiastic Owners Zerminay Shah and Robbie Judkins said “its bangra meets metal, its hip hop meets dub step. We want to offer everything!’ Located in the newly developed ‘carb strip’ Reflex is to have a complete make over if licensing is granted. ‘We want a place that young people can call their own’ says owners Shah and Judkins. Find out what the club will look like.

Harrow youth has announced its new annual carnival after fighting the council for some time since the awful events of 2008 when the annual shindig was stopped. Team Captain Gabriel Tomatoes is looking for volunteers that can help out from the 25^th to th 28^th. ‘We need as many volunteers as possible so that we can create the same atmosphere as the Olympics. That’s my goal’ said the emphatic organiser. See inside for full details of what you can do.

A new Chinese restaurant and buffet Tao Peking has been opened on the corner of Eastcote high street on Leighton Avenue. Its offering of Sichuan as well as  Indo-Chinese fare (curries to you an me) is sure to appeal to the cosmopolitan Eastcote dweller. Their lunchtime all you can eat special is only £5 and already seems to be pulling in the hungry harrovians. Read P. 21 for a full review.

I think my articles which I have re-written will appeal much more to a young audience than my previous ones